The Paladin of Tarrthala by Perry Mcdaid
‘Must to work harder’.
This book should have been right up my street, fantasy fiction, swords and sorcerers, just my thing, but it wasn’t.
At one point, within one page the protagonist, chided himself, scolded himself and muttered bitterly. This use of a variety of speech tags red flags the writer as inexperienced and the continual use of tell not show confirmed this fact. The ‘said’ was conspicuous by its absence.
The story itself was just as bad, it didn’t flow and I was completely lost from the first page. The jumps to alternate realities were not the problem, the problem was the writer trying to secretly hide the story and not give too much away, whilst trying to grab the reader, but he failed.
The free chapters I read weren’t enough to make me want to read on.
Sorry Perry, but needs work.